你提出的论点很好，但整篇文章缺乏呼应连贯。
The points you make are fine, but the whole essay lacks coherence.
多德曼的文章和之前IIED资深工作人员大卫·萨特斯怀特的一个研究相呼应，后者也认为城市的温室气体排放量是总量的40%，而非80%。
Dodman's paper complements an earlier study by IIED senior fellow David Satterthwaite, who argued that cities emit about 40% of all greenhouse gases, as opposed to the oft-cited 80%.
而最终要达到的是，一篇论文有着前后呼应的论点，这些论点从很多书籍或刊物文章中得到论据与相关思想。
The expected end result is a paper making a coherent argument that draws its supporting evidence or ideas from several books or journal articles.
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